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It's quiet
I hear nothing, but
a pendulum
the rhythmatic,
cathartic beat
from Grand Daddy's Clock.

Tick Tock
Tick Tock
Tick Tock.

Like a platoon drill
of marching soldiers
in newly polished heels,
crunching the tarmac
and leaving their clipped,
polished silence
echoing in the stillness.

What is it
about this humdrum
hypnotic feat
that resonates feelings,
buried long
and so deep?


A.M.Young (Please respect copyright)
Trigger feelings.
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Shewroteinblue Apr 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
this is completely beautiful. I can hear the clock, and share the sentiment. love it!
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bared Apr 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for your wonderful compliment. It means a lot to me when another can share and understand the sentiment. :) :rose:
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Shewroteinblue Apr 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
^_^ Of course! you are very welcome.
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:iconfoggyday:
My favorite stanza would be the last, because every time I listen to sounds, music, or voices, different emotions and memories come to me. The second to the last one, though, creates a nostalgic scene of soldiers and of a time that "once was." All in all, very pleasant and sweet imagery here. :aww:
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bared Mar 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for your detailed comments and appreciation. I am happy that you can identify with my words, I really enjoyed writing this poem. :)
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:iconfoggyday:
You are very welcome. It's simple but reminiscent. It's just like you to vary in style and still retain your own voice. :)
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bared Mar 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Vary in style...even I don't know what I am going to write about next! I am too much of a scatter brain to ever plan properly. Thanks again, May. :rose:
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:iconfoggyday:
Hehe. You'll find inspiration soon, probably when you don't expect it. :) Anytime.
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bared Feb 22, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I am glad you enjoyed my poem. :) I deliberately put the comma in the last line, to add space and depth to it's meaning. Many thanks for taking the time to comment also the fave. :rose:
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:iconxlntwtch:
This is good, very rhythmic (as it should/would be) with a terrific message at the end.
If you don't mind a small word of advice, try removing the comma in the last line to keep the rhyme-time. (:
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